In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say that children in these families benefit from the additional income, other feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Discuss both these views and give own opinion.

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Nowadays, it is the norm that both fathers and mothers go to work and earn money to

fulfill

put in effect

fulfil

the daily need of families. In my opinion, I believe that

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a situation can affect their children positive side as well

as negative one

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as a negative one

. On the one hand, children who have both parents working are said not to get enough attention and support. In fact, these children might feel lost and depressed since they lack love from their parents that are always unavailable for comment. Because of being suffered from desolation for a long

time followed

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time, followed

by missing parents’ guidance and supervision, children find it easy to develop undesirable

behaviors

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviours

or even worse, to get involved in social evils

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as drugs or underage drinking. Once these problems occur, it is too late for parents to realize the severity and it would be challenging to help their children mend their ways.

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, I am convinced that children from families with dual-income are in

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an advantageous position

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is because they are provided with

necessities

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the necessities

and quality education to ensure their well-rounded development. Children are not concerned about financial hardship and enjoy a well-provided life so they can fully focus on

academic pursuit

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academic pursuits

and skills improvement.

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, children born in these households have chances to participate in a wild range of entertainment activities

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as travelling to advance their mental well-being, which surpasses families with a single breadwinner. In conclusion,

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the trend that both parents go to work is inevitable nowadays, it is not ideal for children who would be victims of parental negligence.

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, the benefit gained from a household’s extra income is more conducive to the development of children.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

283 words

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dual-income households
financial stability
work-life balance
emotional well-being
parental involvement
social development
extracurricular activities
childcare solutions
time management
career advancement

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