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You have eaten at a restaurant and it was such a terrible experience that you have decided to inform the manager by letter of what happened, and that you want your money back.

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I am writing to complain about the horrible food quality and service that my family and I had at your restaurant. My name is Ishan Saverdekar and we had organised in a small family dinner party at your
pizza
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 hut restaurant on
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 Sunday. We had pre-booked table number 12 for seven people for the same. I was so surprised by finding that both quality and service were compromised throughout our dinner time. We had ordered 5 different pizzas to try out each of from your menu. One of the Italian
pizza
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, which I had ordered, came with under-cooked bread and the cheese was not melted enough. Another pepperoni
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 that my nephew had ordered, he found a cockroach in it.
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, I have asked the waiter to cancel the
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 order and return the money, Anna, the allocated staff for my table, rudely told me that it is not possible to refund the money and I have been asked to replace the
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instead
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 made our dinner party so worse and we had to leave the place without eating. I truly disappointed with your restaurant’s food quality and customer service.
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, I am requesting you to refund the money that I have paid in for advance booking,
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 I will require to take a
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 step by contacting local health and safety department. I look forward to a positive reply. Please find the attached receipt copy of the order. Yours faithfully, Ishan Saverdekar Attachment
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 Order_reciept.pdf

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