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Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think it is good, others think face to face interaction is essential.

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The Digital era has changed the way
communication
 is shared and consumed.
Although
 some people believe that companionship is born through social media and chat groups, I agree with those who argue that
face
 to
face
communication
 is an important part of developing and retaining social relationships. One of the crucial advantages of communicating through the internet is that it allows cultural exchange between people from different nations.
This
 is because of
such
 modes of expression that people can connect and shares their cultural values, social customs, and rituals with each other.
As a result
 of these interactions, children are bringing change in society by questioning domestic violence
such
 as physical, religious, verbal and emotional abuse.
For instance
, Countries of the Middle East banned women from driving due to religious reasons, and
this
 was lifted in 2014 with the help of a million voters of the Facebook community page who voted against
such
 law.
Nevertheless
, I believe
face
 to
face
 interaction is a crucial way to establish long-standing social relations. The reason for
this
 is that
such
 interactions provide an opportunity to ascertain the positive and negative aspects of information exchange via personal expression.
For example
, business are increasing their focus on physical attributes
such
 as eye contact, expressions, and voice tone as selection criteria for interviews to maintain a cordial and friendly working environment among the professionals.
As a result
, people can accommodate real-time modifications that ensure enduring professional and personal relationships.
Conversely
, If people choose social media as an only source of
communication
 in the future,
then
 the friendship could be much short-lived due to incapability of ascertaining these aesthetic emotions. In conclusion,
although
 it is of critical importance that people communicate globally to improve the developing societies, I feel that to retain long-lasting relationships, people should encourage
face
 to
face
communication
 with each other.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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