how does the village park's map change throughout 10 years

The diagrams
illustrates
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illustrate
how a village
park
has changed in 10 years
.
Accept space
.
We can see that ten
year
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years
ago
,
Accept space
,
there was a few places and the empty
area
was so
much but
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much, but
10 years later
,
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,
it was used more efficiently. Around the
park
,
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,
they have built a cycle path
,
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,
inside
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in
many
thing
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things
has changed
.
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.
the
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The
first
thing is the car
park
,
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,
the
ammount
a quantity of money
amount
of
car
the work of providing treatment for or attending to someone or something
care
has been increased so that 50 cars can
park
here comparing to 10 years ago just about 20 cars and the
area
was small
.
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.
Tennis court
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The tennis court
is now bigger
,
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,
with
doubled
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double
area
so there are 4 courts to play
.
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.
In contrast
,
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,
football pitch is smaller than
before but
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before, but
it’s still
bif
above average in size or number or quantity or magnitude or extent
big
.
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.
Children
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Children's
play
area
have been
widen
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widened
and divided in 2 parts
,
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,
the place is for children play and another play is for children soft play
.
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.
the
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The
convenient change is the toilet
,
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,
10 years
ago it
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ago, it
so sad that
ther
in or at that place
there
was no toilet
around but
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around, but
now it has been built so there is no need to worry about
.
Accept space
.
Village
park
now
also
had a picnic
area
, it’s as big as the
teniis
a game played with rackets by two or four players who hit a ball back and forth over a net that divides the court
tennis
Tunis
court
,
Accept space
,
the woods
is replaced
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are replaced
by a café and the pond is now boating lake
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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