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how does the village park's map change throughout 10 years

#village #park #change #years
The given maps f
ive
cause to have, in the abstract sense or physical sense
give
information about t
ransfer
Suggestion
the transfer
that had been done in a v
illlage
a community of people smaller than a town
village
park
 in 10 year period Overall
,
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,
as it can be clearly seen in the
park
,
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,
there are significant changes i
nside
Suggestion
in
the
park
.
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.
Almost corners were rebuilt and enlarged There is still a big e
ntranve
something that provides access (to get in or get out)
entrance
to the north west of the
park
.
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.
h
owever
Suggestion
However
,
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,
there is a new cycle path surrounding the whole place
.
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.
10 years ago
,
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,
the car
park
 only can contain 20 c
ars but
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cars, but
it can consist of 50 c
ar
Suggestion
cars
in maximum now
.
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.
The square of t
ennis court
Suggestion
the tennis court
w
ere doubled
Suggestion
was doubled
,
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,
while the football pitch was being narrowed The c
hildren
Suggestion
children's
play
area
 were s
eperated
being or feeling set or kept apart from others
separated
into two parts remained play
area
 for children and new c
hldrean
Suggestion
children's
children
s
olf
yielding readily to pressure or weight
soft
safe
play
area
.
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.
There are toilet and p
icnic
Suggestion
picnic areas
a picnic area
area
 which the
park
 didn’t have 10 years ago
.
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.
To the south east
,
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,
the pond a
re replaced
Suggestion
is replaced
by b
oating
Suggestion
boat
lake
.
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.
More over , the woods net to it were demolished and now becomes the café
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