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The diagrams below show the changes that has taken place in village park

The diagrams below show the changes that has taken place in village park
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The maps show the changes
of
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in
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 the village
park
 in 10 years .
Overall
 , after 10 years , the village
park
 has more entertainment services
such
 as Picnic
Area
 , cycle path ,
children
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children's
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 soft play
area
 and toilet . The entrance of the
park
 still stays in
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the Northweast
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Northweast
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Northwest
 of the map . There is a cycle path
show
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shown
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 up around the
park
 . The car
park
 in the west of the
park
 expanded to contain from 20 cars to 50 cars . And the tennis
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court
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cour
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court
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 scale is doubled, contrary to the narrowing of the football pitch. The
children
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children's
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plat
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play
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area
 is improved
in to
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into
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the children
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children
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children's
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 play
area
 and
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the children
show examples
children
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children's
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 soft play
area
 . At the east of the
park
. Below
the
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is the
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children
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children's
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plat
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play
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area
. The toilet appears . 10 years ago.
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The southwast
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Southwast
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Southwest
area
 used to be a vacant
area
 . But at
ther
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the
. the picnic
area
show
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shows
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 up
next
 to the
boatin
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boating
boat in
boat
 lake. Which is changed from the pond . the woods which cover the right
area
 of the pond , now it has been replaced by the cafe
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, area, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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