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show the changes of the village park's map 10 years ago and now

#show #changes #village #park #years
The diagrams
desribe
give a description of
describe
 the differences between the
billager
one who has lived in a village most of their life
villager
villagers
blogger
 park 10
yeasr
a late time of life
years
year
 ago and now
.
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.
 Overall
,
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,
 we can see that the
area
 of the park didn’t change in a decade
,
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,
ut
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
out
but
 the arrangement inside had changed a lot. It can be seen that the tennis court has double its size and the
carpark which
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car park, which
car park which
 just
coud
requests polite permission
could
 be placed 20 cars inside now can be put in over 50 cars. The
footballpitch’s
 size
also
 decreased and gave the place for a new Picnic
area
. Behind the tennis
cour
an assembly (including one or more judges) to conduct judicial business
court
,
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,
 the children play
area
 became two different
part
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parts
:
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:
 the soft play
area
 and the play
area
.
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.
Next
 to it
,
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,
 there is a new
toilet which
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toilet, which
 is near the football pitch too. The whole woods in the back
had became
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became
 a
cafe
strongbox where valuables can be safely kept
safe
 place and still had some trees around it in front of it
,
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,
 the
pond
an unofficial association of people or groups
band
chaged
made or become different in nature or form
changed
 to a
boatng
water travel for pleasure
boating
 lake. We can easily seen that around the park now have the cycle path for visitors
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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