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Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree? Use specific details and examples to explain your view

#people #person #skills #group #activities
It is argued that the cognitive
talents develops
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talents, develop
talents develop
 to a greater extent when performing the tasks collaboratively
.
Accept space
.
I strongly agree with that suggestion because of the benefits it brings to pupils.The
first
 part of
essay
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the essay
 will highlight as how the mass tasks will help the pupil in developing their communication skill and
then
 discuss how these
collaboration
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collaborations
 is valued by universities and organizations.
Firstly
,
Accept space
,
Limiting an individual to work on single basis acts as
an
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a
 barrier in developing the communication skills.Many humans feel shy to interact and mingle with others in expressing their opinions thinking that they are inferior to others of the same age and they develop stage phobia which stays strong in their lives until
there
of them or themselves
their
last
 stage.
For example
,
recent study
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a recent study
the recent study
 from an article shows that student who works individually during their early schooling days who are
faces
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facing
 severe
ramiffications
the act of branching out or dividing into branches
ramifications
 when they are allowed to participate in a group discussion.Since they are not aware
as
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at
 how to behave according to the article it was reported to be found that they have
phobia
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a phobia
 of communicating in a group
although
 they have strong opinions and concrete ideas involved in the discussion.
Secondly
,
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,
In the growing number of graduates a year the
humman
characteristic of humanity
human
 resource
developmenet
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
developments
 in
Corporates
of or belonging to a corporation
corporate
 and multi conglomerate companies
are now looking
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is now looking
 to shortlist candidates based on how an individual mingles with others
.
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.
Intepersonal
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Interpersonal
 skills
such
 as
responsiblity
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
 delegation
,
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,
planning and coordination are most important in an organization and the companies are always
recruitting
register formally as a participant or member
recruiting
recreating
 the candidates who are very good in interpersonal skills.To illustrate
,
Accept space
,
An
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A
 US Stock company Deshaw recruited a candidate based on the interpersonal skills and not on the academic skills.
Furthermore
,
Accept space
,
in a press conference they echoed that " The interpersonal skills are the inherent skills which cannot be taught by
amn
indefinite article, "an" is use before a vowel sound, "a" otherwise
an
 organization
such
 as
us whereas
Accept comma addition
ours, whereas
ours whereas
 we have experts who can teach the academic skills on the run for our prospective employees " In conclusion,
pupil
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pupils
the pupil
 should be allowed to partake the things in the group which will
certaily
definitely or positively ('sure' is sometimes used informally for 'surely')
certainly
 help them to build the interpersonal skills and
also
 make them
to stay
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stay
 unique in the crowd from the recruitment stands.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intellectual skills
  • group activities
  • collaborative learning
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • communication
  • interpersonal skills
  • diverse perspectives
  • creativity
  • individual study
  • personal reflection
  • autonomy
  • learning styles
  • approaches
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