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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, ifso, how?

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English is a mandatory subject starting from kindergarten school and is an absolute necessity to achieve your desired goals in
life
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. Every profession in India requires a fluent English speaking person due to the globalization of industries. English has become the common
language
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 amongst almost all countries to overcome the
language
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 barrier due to local languages. It has made communication easier for people who are from different
countries yet
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countries, yet
 working together as a team. Being a common
language
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 to communicate, schools have started to focus on teaching English more than the local languages to prepare children to
over come
win a victory over
overcome
ths
denotes a person or thing
this
these
 upcoming
language
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 barrier in their professional
life
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. Be that as it may, local languages
are given
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give
 less importance
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
to
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for
this
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 very reason and local languages are on verge of dying out. In today's world, English has become the
foundamental
serving as an essential component
fundamental
 need for every step in
life
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, be it getting into a good school or getting that dream job of yours.
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, getting admission in schools require an interview and written test which are
alawys
at all times; all the time and on every occasion
always
 in English and not focusing on English might challenge your chances of getting into that prestigious
acedmy
a secondary school (usually private)
academy
. Same practice can be seen for hiring professional whee interviewers judging criteria
also
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 includes how fluent a candidate is in English. Speaking
local
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the local language
language
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 is
alomst
(of actions or states) slightly short of or not quite accomplished; all but
almost
 a sin in an interview now a days. English being
such
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 an important factor for a person in day-to-day
life
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, schools
are concentrating
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is concentrating
 more
on
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in
 English than local languages due to which local languages are not even in
curriculamns
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 anymore.
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, Haryanvi which is a local
language
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 of
haryana
a state in northern India
Haryana
 is not in any
slybus
an integrated course of academic studies
syllabus
slips
 and not allowed to speak in classrooms. Children
studing
reading carefully with intent to remember
studying
standing
 in elite schools don't even know how to speak Haryanvi
.
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.
 Schools have to make sure local languages
are given
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give
 equal importance as English
eslse
a small island
isles
 many are at
rish
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 of dying out. To conclude, I believe that English is necessary to succeed in all walks of
life
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 as it makes one more confident.
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, the local
language
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also
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 needs to be given their due respect. I feel an equal effort should be made by individuals to learn both these languages.

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