Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Currently, many parents tend to be busy working, and they need to rely on someone else to take care of their offspring. While some people think childcare organisations can offer the best care, I would argue that it is better for children to be looked after by their grandparents. On the one hand, it is believed that youngsters should be sent to
childcare
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child care
centres for some reasons. The
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one is that since those centres are professional organisations, their staff are often well trained and
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have good babysitting skills.
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, when a child falls over and gets himself injured, a staff can react quickly and give him
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aid.
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, children can have a chance to make friends with their peers when coming there, which might increase their communication and language abilities. If they are looked after by their family at home, they might feel a bit lonely.
On the other hand
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, I believe it is a better idea for grandparents to take care of their grandchildren.
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, as grandparents have lived for many years and have brought up their own offspring, they have much experience in raising children.
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, they might know how to calm the baby down when he cries.
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, grandparents
are
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family members, so they love their grandchildren more than other people do.
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, they tend to spend much more time and effort caring for their grandchildren compared to a
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child care
staff member.
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, youngsters looked after by their grandparents are likely to become more family-oriented and appreciate the value of a happy family.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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