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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant if necessary. Write atleast 250words

#salary #job #satisfaction #atleast
It is a common notion that higher wages surpasses the importance of
satisfaction
 in a
job
. I completely agree with it and I think that pay is more important that
satisfaction
 at work.
Firstly
,
job
satisfaction
 is an overrated concept and
that is
 not what we want to achieve out of a
job
. What any organization promises
to give
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give
 you in return to the work that you do for them is primarily the salary and not an abstract emotion of
satisfaction
.
Morever when
Accept comma addition
Moreover, when
Moreover when
 we start looking for a
job
 and are jobless we will know what we actually want and a good pay would rank high.
For instance
, the person who is hanging
on
Suggestion
in
 a harness to clean glass windows of high-rise buildings is not doing it for
job
satisfaction
. All he needs is money and that's what he is working and taking the risk for. Salary is the outcome of a
job
 as opposed to
job
satisfaction
.
Additionally
, in a real world scenario we cannot exchange the idea of '
job
satisfaction
' with anything. Meaning, you cannot buy anything just because you are satisfied. We need real money for that and in most cases, only good salary can give you that. Take for an example that you have a writer's
job
 that you love, but pays you barely enough to pay your rent. Will you be able to survive with that kind of lifestyle just because you are satisfied? In any case, there is no replacement
to
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for
 money in today's society and one must strive for the same. To conclude, while a big salary has the chances of getting
you
of you or yourself
your
 happiness with at least materialistic things the idea of chasing something as abstract as
satisfaction
 will not get you anything. If we set our expectations from a
job
 right, we are good to go.

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