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In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is this a positive or negative development?

#world #shop #work #people #internet #contact #development
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With
advancement
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the advancement
 of
technologies especially
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technologies, especially
 due to Internet humans life changed drastically.
Today people
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Today, people
 can do anything online without even facing or contacting with anyone. In my
opinion
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opinion, this
this
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 change is completely against the
humans
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human
 social skills and relations with other persons.
First
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 of all, use of social and commercial websites
have
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has
 dangerous effects on
people
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peoples'
person's
 social activities.
This
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 limited their verbal communication and interaction with others, because while doing shopping e-commerce one doesn’t interact with any person. Personally, I have seen many of my friends afraid to approach to
girls
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the girls
 directly but prefer to communicate
on
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with
 social media.
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, relying more on online communication will deter one’s confidence to face someone and make them feel uncomfortable. Another reason would be that it
cause
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causes
 an un-trust in relations. We always heard that relations
becomes
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become
 strong with meets and greets.
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