In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is this a positive or negative development?

#world #shop #work #people #internet #contact #development

With

advancement

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the advancement

technologies especially

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technologies, especially

due to Internet humans life changed drastically.

Today people

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Today, people

can do anything online without even facing or contacting with anyone. In my

opinion

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opinion, this

this

change is completely against the

humans

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human

social skills and relations with other persons.

First

of all, use of social and commercial websites

have

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has

dangerous effects on

people

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peoples'

person's

social activities.

This

limited their verbal communication and interaction with others, because while doing shopping e-commerce one doesn’t interact with any person. Personally, I have seen many of my friends afraid to approach to

girls

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the girls

directly but prefer to communicate

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with

social media.

Consequently

, relying more on online communication will deter one’s confidence to face someone and make them feel uncomfortable. Another reason would be that it

cause

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causes

an un-trust in relations. We always heard that relations

becomes

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become

strong with meets and greets.

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In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is this a positive or negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

The threat of nuclear weapons maintains the world peace. The benefits of nuclear technology far out-weight the disadvantages.

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Advantages and disadvantages using internet in the modern era