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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #environment #government’s #responsibility
The
environment
 is drastically changing and its protection is the major concern.
Although
, Some people hold a debate on whose responsibility is it to protect the
environment
, government or individuals? In my opinion, both are equally responsible for saving the
environment
.
Firstly
, Governments have different authorities and resources to maintain the balance of nature. While developing, any city, town or
industry many
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industry, many
 trees
are being cut
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is being cut
 down to create infra for the people who are going to live there; So the environmental departments of that area is responsible to plant more trees to compensate the green cover which they have reduced.
Additionally
, the development of different industries
lead
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leads
 to
pollution problem
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the pollution problem
pollution problems
 at different
levels
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levels, such
such
 as water, air, and noise pollution, so different measures should be taken by higher authorities to control the level of pollutants.
Secondly
, the government can only manage things at bigger levels so it is the individual's responsibility to maintain the balance in the local area and remote areas. For illustration, an Indian 42
years
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year
 old man from Kerala named
joseph
(New Testament) husband of Mary and (in Christian belief) the foster father of Jesus
Joseph
, restored 23,000 acres of land which was
turning
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turned
 into a desert due to deforestation, by planting thousands of trees he refurbished that land become forest again and help different animal species to live in their natural habitats. So individuals should try to plant more trees around their habitat and try to keep the city clean to minimize the pollution and maintain the balance of nature. In conclusion, I would like to say that the Government and
individuals both
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individuals, both
 play a vital role in helping the
environment
 flourish. They need to work hand in hand to create a better atmosphere for the future generations.

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