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In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

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Smoking has been banned in public places like parks, hospitals, public transport and restaurants in many nations.
This
 essay agrees with
this
 initiative because it reduces the harmful effects of passive smoking and
also
 encourages smokers to quit. The primary reason why making it illegal to
smoke
 in public makes sense is preventing people from having to breathe in
second
-
handsmoke
Suggestion
hand smoke
. Passive smoking can lead to many smoking-related diseases
such
 as lung cancer, heart disease and stroke, and is something that non-smokers cannot
avoid in the presence
Suggestion
avoid the presence
 of a smoker. The British Medical Association found that non-smokers who were regularly exposed to tobacco
smoke
 were 4 times more likely to develop lung cancer, than those who did not have to breathe in
second
-hand
smoke
. The
second
 main reason is that
this
 ban helps those addicted to cigarettes quit their habit. When smokers and non-smokers socialize together, the smokers are often ostracised from the group because they have to leave the company of everyone else if they want to light up.
As a result
, smokers who decided to quit would feel more a part of the social
gatherings
Suggestion
gathering
 they attend, and
this
 should encourage people who
smoke
 to give it up.
This
 has proven particularly effective in Ireland, the
first
 country to introduce a nationwide ban, where people have to leave a bar or restaurant and
smoke
 outside. In conclusion, making it against the law to
smoke
 around strangers should be encouraged because it prevents innocent people from dying of passive smoking and reduces the number of smokers.

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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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