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Some people think woman should be allowed to join the army, the Navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think
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women
a woman
 should be allowed to join the
army
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, the Navy and the
air
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force
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 just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Many people believe that women should be accepted just like
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man
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a man
men
 to be in
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army
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the army
, navy or
air
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force
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. I agree with the fact that women are far more prepared and capable to do greater thinks than
man
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.
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, over the
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decades women
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decades, women
 has proven that they have a great sense of protection, patience and ability to work under the pressure due to the fact that they have experience in children, household and job
in
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at
 the same time. Why women cannot be equal to the
man
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? Since the women won the right of equality the society has been highly improved. Even if the women experienced opposition in their
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the person or thing chosen or selected
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cause
case
course
, they confronted and persuaded for their
beliefs that’ s
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beliefs, that’s
beliefs that’s
 the reason why today many women are part of
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army
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the army
, navy or
air
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force
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 Other categories of people thinking that the women shouldn’t be allowed to be in
army
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 as women has seen to be more fragile and week
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 only
man
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 should be in
this
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 kind of place. I disagree with
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 idea because women
has proven
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have proven
 their ability in the same way like
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man
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men
the man
a man
 did. In conclusion, I totally agree with the statement that women should be accepted to be in
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army
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the army
, navy or
air
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force
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 just like
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man
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a man
, considered that we should be equal and everyone should be accepted as they are Overall, nobody should tell them what to do or not to do.

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