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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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It is natural for citizens of a
country
to expect
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expect
 free
health
 service, even if it means that the latest medical treatments may not be available because they're too expensive. I strongly agree
to
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with
this
 school of thought even though some people might argue that it doesn't make sense since poor people have trouble paying for costly treatments and not
the cheaper
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the cheap
 ones.
Firstly
, with the growing population of people, not everyone can afford to pay for their medical bills.
For example
, in a house with 5 kids, parents might not be able to spend on each child's
health
 related expenses. Which means that some people will suffer over the others simply because they were born into families with more children.
Secondly
, the
country
 relies on its people to run its economy; which makes it the government’s responsibility to ensure that people living in the
country
 are hail and hearty.
However
, if we were to think of a
country
 where most people are suffering from some or the other ailment, who will work or run a business which in turn makes the nation flourish too? To conclude, I believe free
health
 services should be made available
by
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from
in
every
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every country, even
country
 even if it covers only the basic services.
Afterall
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After all
, something is better than nothing! Making expensive treatments slightly pocket friendly for the underprivileged would be ideal. In that case, it won’t be a complete loss for the
health
 care industry. But basic checkups and other treatments should be definitely made free of cost.

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