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In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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After the evolution of industrial revolution industrialization can be seen in
whole world
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the whole world
. Tremendously rise in new factories have some positive effects as well as negative
also
.
However
, the disadvantage
are
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is
 more as compared to advantage of
this
.
To begin
 with, in certain nations the governing body is supporting the businesses and factories to shift from rural areas
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 close to urban areas. No doubt while, transfer from one place to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 place near to city generates plethora of job opportunities for youth generation and minimal the rate of unemployment in that area. Because of technological advancement the new equipments and
mechinary
machines or machine systems collectively
machinery
 are used in the fields of manufacturing
as a result
 of
this
 manually working force became jobless in some villages.
In addition
 to
,
Accept space
,
 changing the position of large scale firms and moving them near outside the populated region is the invitation to pollution in that city. Urban areas
is
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are
 all ready polluted because of transportation emissions of
fules
a substance that can be consumed to produce energy
fuels
 and it will become worse when smoke of that industry
mixe
mix together different elements
mix
mixed
mixer
 in the air.
Moreover
, the solid waste and liquid waste chemical will create the Hazard for health issues and it will generate the problem of soil erosion as well as water contamination in that locality.
For instance
, in the
capita
assets available for use in the production of further assets
capital
 city of the India New Delhi pollution rate is increasing significantly due to the establishment of many factories near local area. To put it in the nutshell, I will pen down by saying that the decision of the government is not profitable for pupils and it's bad aspect are more in numbers as compared to its
good
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best
 one. To
putting
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put
 health and prosperity of our people in mind political parties should make decisions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regional areas
  • big cities
  • encouraging
  • industries
  • businesses
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • economic growth
  • overcrowding
  • traffic congestion
  • employment opportunities
  • balanced regional development
  • preservation of natural resources
  • quality of life
  • cultural diversity
  • lack of infrastructure
  • amenities
  • skilled workers
  • impact on the environment
  • decline in the economy
  • social and cultural challenges
  • integrating
  • new industries
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