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Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure center that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council . in your letter Give details of how you and your friends or family use the center Explain why the sports and leisure center is important for the local community Describe the possible effects on local people if the center closes.

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Recently, I heard a piece of news regarding you are going to close an entertainment complex
that is
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 active now, in order to economize. Please before do
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, think carefully and deeply about its consequences. The
center
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 includes a swimming pool, music club, coffee shop, and other leisure facilities. I personally prefer to go there most weekends to have fun, especially really enjoy dancing in the music club. My friends use more swimming
pool
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pools
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 rather than other facilities. Because its water is refreshed two times a week. Today, in modern life, most people are involved with daily problems like heavy traffics, air and noise pollution, stress pressure and so on. For reducing
them
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 bad effects on us, going to a sports and leisure
center
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 is necessary. Apart from that, it makes to release some negative energy and feel happy. The closing leisure institution will put some bad impacts on local people, especially the young generation. If they couldn’t find a suitable place to have fun with their friends, they are more likely
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 social networks and online games. I hope that
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 letter has a positive impact on your decision-making.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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