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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems to what extent do you agree or disagree

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution
Nowadays roads are congested and
air
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the air
 is extremely polluted because of increasing
use
 of vehicles. Some people believe that the rising
price
 of
petrol
 will be solved
traffic
 yam and
air
 pollutions.
However
, growing up
price
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the price
 of
petrol
 is not the suitable solution for
this
 problem.
This
 essay will disagree with the statement and provide alternative solutions. Generally, if the government increases the
price
 of
petrol
, local people will effect on financial. Because,
thecountryside
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the countryside
 has not development of
transport system
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the transport system
,
therefore
 people who are living there,
use
 personal vehicles for their transportation. Rich people are not considered about cost of fuel because, money is not
biggest problem
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the biggest problem
. As the result of increasing the
price
 will
caused
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cause
life style
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the life style
a life style
 of local people.
On the other hand
, the government should develop transportation facilities
such
 as rearranging the roads, increase the amount of signal light and
traffic
 guides. Due to
this
 improvement will be
helped
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helping
on
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to
 reduce of congested on roads.
Furthermore
, if the cost of train tickets will reduce most people prefer to
use
train
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trains
 rather than bus or own vehicles. There by development of
transport
 facilities is
grater way
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a grater way
a greater way
 to reduce
traffic problem
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traffic problems
the traffic problem
.
Finally
, if the government will introduce the biofuel for low cost, most of the people consume biofuel for their
transport
. Due to
this
 change will be
protected our
Accept comma addition
protected, our
 atmosphere through
environment
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environmentally
 friendly substances.
For example
, when we
use
 biofuel to get energy, it releases water, oxygen and
the less amount
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the least amount
 of carbon dioxide.
Therefore
, increasing rate of
air
 pollution will be controlled by using biofuels rather than
petrol
. In conclusion,
traffic
 and
air
 pollution are not controlled by increasing
price
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the price
 of
petrol
. Due to the development of
transport
 facilities and introduce environmental friendly fuels will reduce the problems and the fact that there are more effective ways of controlling
traffic
 and pollution problems.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discourage
  • incentivize
  • environmentally friendly
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • pollutants
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable economy
  • disproportionately affect
  • daily commuting
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • comprehensive solutions
  • public transportation systems
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