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Who is responsible for any student to become successful in their studies, either teacher or student? There remain some disagreements;
however
, in my opinion, I strongly consider students should take the responsibility of their success and failure in their educational field.
This
essay will discuss both side argument and include my opinion as well. On the one hand, those who believe teachers are the epicentre of achievement of learners point out that,
educationalists
mould and guide how to attain goals and aims of the
eduaction
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
.
In other words
,
Accept space
,
learners are constantly prepared to encounter various challenges and hardships when they make
juerney
Suggestion
journeys
journey
gurney
to be victorious when it comes studies.
Additionally
,
educationalist
, they are trained to channelise children’s knowledge and wisdom in the right direction to attain the highest level of education in their life by training,
demonstaring
, teaching concepts and ideas.
By contrast
, if students try to learn these concepts by self, they may be misguided since they
donot
Suggestion
do not
get any
proffesional
engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood
professional
assistance. Despite,
nevertheless
, the above mentioned argument, several people think that students
who owing
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who, owing
to the accountability of their actions when they study and
i
of me or myself
my
I
support
this
viewpoint.
This
means even though teachers
instuct
impart skills or knowledge to
instruct
them to follow certain steps and strategies,
this
is the sole responsibility of learners to work hard to succeed rather than overly depending on instructors because they can show only the path which students have to follow. Especially,
nowadyas
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
, both
school
Suggestion
schools
and teachers are just facilitators, children should take in charge of their learning. By way of conclusion, while people have different opinion on
whomust
Suggestion
who must
take the accountability of successful education, I again reaffirm that it is learners must take
actions
Suggestion
action
if they want to be achieve their educational goals.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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