For many, shopping malls are great places to spend their leisure time and meet others. People, however, in the past mostly visited those when necessary. To what extent do you think this is a negative trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A considerable number of people believe that large shopping centres are good for
meet ups
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meet-ups
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and for spending spare
time
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.
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,
historically
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historically,
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the trend was to go there only when required. In my opinion,
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is not an adverse change.
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essay shall cover reasons to show that
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behaviour is not bad.
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,
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the grand
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grand mall
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Grand Mall
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is well developed
keeping
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, keeping
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all security aspects in mind. They have camera systems installed, security checkpoints,
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and guards
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patrolling
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, making
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it a safe place for everyone.
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down the road with your friends
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or sitting in the park with family exposes as to
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the risk
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of street crimes like snatching and harassment. Central surveillance systems in these shopping hubs make it less
liking
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likely
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for
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incidents to occur. So everyone can hang out with a peaceful mind.
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, shopping malls have a variety of stores under the same roof, allowing you to have a whole experience. You can plan your
time
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off work
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your will without having to go
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places
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the hassle of driving.
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, you can
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buy
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grocery
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groceries
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, grab a sandwich, watch a movie and buy your favourite book all at once! And in
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manner
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it saves both
time
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and energy. People have been for long
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been seeking
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secure places to spend their
time
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with friends and family
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, and
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such
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places provide just that. It possesses all the essentials to cover our shopping and entertainment needs. In conclusion, I would reinforce that
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change in
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society is a good one.

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task response
Make your view clear at the start. Say if you think malls are good or not and why.
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Add more points about the bad side too, then show why the good side is stronger.
stance
Clear view that malls can be good for meet ups.
content
Uses examples to show safety and time saved.

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