Q. As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing more and more jobs. Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers, and discuss at least one problem that may result.

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jobs are getting replaced by computers. According to a latest study, one job created by artificial intelligence takes one hundred individual jobs. The work of a computer is very fast and precise as compared to a human

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, they are more preferred at a workplace. With the advent of artificial intelligence and machine learning a lot of things have been made easy. Jobs in accounting, data entries are being taken over by computers day by day because who needs a person to store data

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a computer, when it gets stored automatically. The hardware jobs have already been replaced by machines, the physical strength, durability of a man is less than a machine. In some restaurants now-a-days, there are no workers available so you have to type your order into a computer

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take it from there only. Things

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as ‘Amazon Go’ has taken

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. In ‘Amazon Go’ the store has no people working there, you shop all the things you need and exit the store the total bill amount will automatically be deducted from your amazon account. These kind of cases result

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to the increase of unemployment rate in the world. When no person is needed to bill your cart, change your car tyres, take your orders, wash your cars, etc. The human population is getting laid off due to

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. In the future ahead, I think Computers will permanently replace humans in a lot of jobs

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creating more man jobs in Machine servicing, Computer

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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265 words

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Q. As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing more and more jobs. Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers, and discuss at least one problem that may result.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many different countries have most shops and products as the same. Some consider it a positive development, whereas others consider it negative. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some believe that people today have no interest in maintaining the traditional culture of their country. Others believe that it is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Social media has replaced the traditional methods of communication, and people use more and more social media to communicate, and to follow news and events. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

Learning English at school is often seen as more important than local languages.If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?