Question : some young people are leaving the country side to live in cities and town, leaving only old people in countryside. What problem does this cause? What can be done to solve this problem?

Nowadays, some of
youngestes
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the youngsters
youngsters
are moving away from rural
area leaving
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area, leaving
old people behind. While at least three negative consequences could result from
this
situation, some straightforward measures can be adopted to alleviate them. The problems posed by the migration of young people are manifold. Perhaps the major issue we need
takle
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to take
take
with is the negative impacts on
economic status
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the economic status
of the
countryside
. Young people play an important role in available force labour in these areas as they are more suitable than older ones for jobs demanding physically or involving new
techology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
.
Besides
, they
constituet
form or compose
constitute
constituted
the majority of workers in the
countryside
.
Therefore
, many sectors including farming and industry might run into problem with force labour.
This
situation would decrease the output of them, and
as a result
, it would put these areas in economic depression. A
second
challenge is increasing the cost of health services. Many of older
aduts
a fully developed person from maturity onward
adults
in the
countryside
live with their children or even they live
seperately
apart from others
separately
, their children take care of them. Without their children, the
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
are responsible
of
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for
taking care of old people. In fact, the authorities should pay money
to
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for
nurses and improve
infrastuctures
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructures
like health centres and hospitals.
Finally
,
old
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older
people may suffer from psychiatric disorders.
This
population
usually tend
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usually tends
to spend time
in
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with
their family, rely on their children and in fact, they are tied to younger people. If
young member
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a young member
of their family move to cities, they would get mentally ill.
Therefore
, a
number
of effective remedies must be implemented to tackle these issues.
First
key step would be providing an incentive for young people to stay
at
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in
the
countryside
. The
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
should expand infrastructures
such
as mall shops, entertainment centres, public transportation and hospitals in these areas.
This
may lead to an increase in quality of life of
yeoung
(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth
young
people and
therefore
, they would be willing to stay
at
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in
the
countryside
. A
further
step could be attracting
habitates
an established custom
habits
of urban areas to live in the
countryside
. Some people,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
young adults, prefer to live in
places allowing
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places, allowing
them to
seve
save from ruin, destruction, or harm
save
money on
cost
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the cost
of living. The
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
could subsidize end meets of
people including
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people, including
fuel, housing and education.
Therefore
,
this
approach may recover
the
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the amount
number
of young individuals in these
areasover
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areas over
the time and prevent
this places
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this, place
this place
these places
from facing problem relating
with
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to
migrations of
yooung
(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth
young
adults. By way of
coclusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, decreasing the
number
of young people in the
countryside
may lead to an economic depression in these areas, overspending health care budget and increasing the
number
of
old
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older
people suffering from
mentall
involving the mind or an intellectual process
mental
diseases.
but
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But
this
situation could be addressed by getting
appraches
move towards
approaches
to improve quality of life of young people living in the
countryside
and to attract inhabitants of urban areas involved.
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