Environmental hazards are often too great for particular countries or individulas to tackle. We have arri ved at a point in time where the only way to lessen environmental problem is at an international level . To what extent do you agree or disagree.

natural disasters have
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a significant problem for governments as it evolved much in the
last
century.
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, most undeveloped
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countries
can not handle the cost of rebuilding the
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of it. I totally agree with
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especialy
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especially
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people
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attention
about
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the world state
have
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decreased. The main cause of
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the
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careless
action
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actions
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that have
a negative
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a negative affect
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affects
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in
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the earth
such
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,
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wasting plastic and
throw
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it in the sea and CO2
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emissions
.
However
,
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that unfortunately became more
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and essential
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of our daily basics have
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evolution in world disasters.
For example
, In 2016 a hurricane
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accurred
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occurred
in the United
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in the name of
mitro
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.
people
who experienced that disaster described it as the slaughter of houses.The county economy
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declined much in that time as the
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of
people
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became homeless was a mere
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900,000. In my opinion, the most effective solution is to enhance
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awareness of the output of
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action
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and find alternatives for any tool that may affect our world.For
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example
,
the
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compeny
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company
named
teasla
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have
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created
a
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electric car that
have
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no negative output
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global warming.
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Furthermore
, the United State have
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the company for
this
innovation but the major problem is that the cost of
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it
as
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very high to the point that only
walthy poeple
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wealthy people
have the capability to buy it. In conclusion, environmental
problem
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problems
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have
became
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a major matter and in the
future
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it
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may affect every life aspect if we
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not
applied
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any solution
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The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, framing the argument well.
complete response
There is a clear attempt to discuss international cooperation as a solution to environmental issues, which directly addresses the question.

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