The diagram below shows how coffee is produced and prepared for sale in supermarkets and shops. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how coffee is produced and prepared for sale in supermarkets and shops.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the way in which
coffee
is produced from a farm and the way in which it is made ready for sale.
Overall
, the process consists of eleven stages beginning with
coffee
beans, picking and ending up with the packing of
mixture
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the mixture
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into jars.
Coffee
manufacturing starts with the picking of
coffee
beans. Once the
coffee
beans are picked, they are dried in the sun for some time. After that, they are roasted in a closed container.
Following
this
, they are cooled down rapidly before passing them into a grinder.
Then
they are ground in a machine to produce
powder
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a powder
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. In the
next
stage, they are mixed with hot water to produce a mixture.
This
mixture is
then
strained for
further
freezing in a closed environment.
Then
after that, the frozen liquid is again grounded to form a fine
powder
.
Next
, the fine ground
powder
is dried in a vacuum to evaporate the remaining water content.
Finally
, the
coffee
powder
is packed into airtight containers for selling in shops.
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