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In many places, people’s lifestyles are changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of such developments outweigh the disadvantages?

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Changing dramatically in the way of living has particular impacts on the family relationship in many regions. Despite some obvious advantages of
this
 trend, I would argue that these are outweighed by its disadvantages, and in
this
 essay, I will support my opinion with evidence and examples. On the one hand, the development in human lifestyle has some major benefits
for
Suggestion
of
 the family association.
Firstly
, the connection between members becomes more easily because of
technology
Suggestion
technological
 progress regardless of their geographic position.
For example
, students studying overseas could be not difficult to share or transfer photos about anywhere they travel via social networks with their family.
As a result
, parents could follow their children’s status with only a smartphone being able to access the internet.
Secondly
, modern society brings opportunities for travelling for households. By doing
this
, family members would have more
time
 together to escape temporarily from a busy life.
On the other hand
, I believe that its drawbacks are more considerable than
such
 advantages. One reason for
this
 view is that people would be depended much more on technology, which leads to reduce the interaction.
Youngers
 usually tend to search for information and helps on the internet rather than from parents and grandparents.
This
 causes a lack of family conversations. Another reason is due to
pressures
Suggestion
pressure
 of work in modern society, there would be no
time
 for parents to spend
on
Suggestion
with
 family. Parents often have to finish daily work mass very late so that they lack
time
 to have dinner with family or talk together.
This
 is
also
 a contributing factor to the increasing divorce rate. In conclusion, it seems to me that the drawbacks of depending much more on technology and lack of
time
 for family outweigh its benefits, and I suppose
this
 is a negative trend.

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
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  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • geographic separation
  • economic advancement
  • technological advancements
  • face-to-face interactions
  • egalitarian structures
  • gender roles
  • traditional roles
  • work demands
  • financial stability
  • access to education
  • healthcare
  • cultural shifts
  • traditions
  • cultural identity
  • family heritage
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