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Some people believe that children's time outside of school should be filled with scheduled activities such as art and music classes and sports. others feel that children need free time to play and relax. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Many children or teenagers have been
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, having a fixed schedule in daily routine life is made men perfect who wants to achieve their goal of doing some extra activities.
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, some individuals said, children can feel free after his or her school
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time so
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time, so
, they have to use it to stay home with family or taking a valuable nape. I support the former view with the details rather than the
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 statement. The daily routine activities that describe the extra talent in the children having
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 of only the academic skills and knowledge. Even more, it will help them to achieve some extraordinary achievements in
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 competitive society.
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, they could get the chance to refresh their minds and robust
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 energy out of the educational environment. If today's generation joins the extra curriculum classes before or after school
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, they can show up their ability to do extra achievements in the world.
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, joining drawing classes or dancing classes that help to gain their hobby's skill
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of
 that child. As far as, they could able to enjoy
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 hobby, parents should focus on their children's interesting hobby's activities. On the other side, the students who doesn't interested to do some extra
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 of the educational
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activities, then
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 the family
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 is the best option for them.
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, joining a family
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, especially with the grandparents
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 the best choice for them. So, they can learn something new from their grand guardian's stories and they can teach something in their daily lifestyle.
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, some grandparents
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 like to tell a story to his grandson so either, both the way they can enjoy their life and live a happy life in society. In
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, even though, the children have been interested to bust up their skills or hobbies in the future, it will help them to achieve extraordinary achievements and give the
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 of sitting at home and passing the
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 with a
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relaxed
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 mood the good skills are the best option in today's advanced world.
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