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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 day and age, young generation is the base of any nation as an effect they
having
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have
are having
 an important role in
society
, so for their self building individuals said that some
chairty
a foundation created to promote the public good (not for assistance to any particular individuals)
charity
work
 include in high
school
 programmes. I strongly argued that government should take action related unpaid task in community for youngsters.
Firstly
, in the age of high
school
, students need to build their self confidence and get experience by doing unpaid
work
. Due to
achivieving
to gain with effort
achieving
 confidence they do not
relay
have confidence or faith in
rely
 on parents and doing jobs independently
for
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from
this
governments
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government
 should
starts
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start
 programs,
compaigns
a race between candidates for elective office
campaigns
campaign
 and workshops in the
school
to teach
Suggestion
teach
school
 community.
For example
, a recent research shown that many countries started programs and unpaid
interships
the position of a medical intern
internships
 to train the students for their respective a professional
fields
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field
. By doing
this
, they can have more exposure to their related fields of
work
.
secondly
Suggestion
Secondly
, by doing free
work
 in
society
, it will help to young generation become socially responsible. They will help
handicaped
incapable of functioning as a consequence of injury or illness
handicapped
 people, cleaning the roads of
society
 as well
work
 in old age homes, later on, it will help in professional life.
For example
, some students stop their education at
high
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the high school level, so this
the high school level so, this
school
 level so,
this
 experience will help getting a job in hospitals as
well factories
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well as factories
 or as a labour. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that unpaid task in
society
 will be more beneficial for that these programs should be
compulsory part
Suggestion
a compulsory part
 of high
schools
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school
.
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