Some people think the government funding should not be used for supporting art and culture, others think supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People are divided on the opinion of the government spendings on art and culture. It is often thought by some that the authorities ought to be
focus
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focused
on promoting the arts;
however
, in my
opinion i
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opinion, I
opinion I
agree with the view that other issues like health and education require more attention and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agree. There are
variety
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a variety
of
reaons
a rational motive for a belief or action
reasons
why people believe that financial support for art activities is of less importance and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agree.
To begin
with, education and health sector in most of
countries
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the countries
are not
upto
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up to
the mark.
In other words
, in order to meet standards set by world health organization, a great deal of money is
required which
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required, which
can be poured
in
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into
these services by saving budget from cultural
programes
a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished
programs
programmes
programme
. Healthy and educated community
are
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is
more essential for
thriving country
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a thriving country
in terms of
economical situation
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the economic situation
economic situation
.
Therefore
, it seems to me that allocating budget to build hospitals and educational
institues
set up or lay the groundwork for
institutes
are definitely much more important
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
spending to cultural activities.
Nevertheless
, proponents of opposite view argue that it is necessary for young generation to be aware of their history and culture. As a matter of fact, no nation could be able to survive after losing its identity in
this
modern era. If policy makers will not shift their concentration towards promoting
artistic
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arts
events, community will be heavily
influced
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influenced
by cultures of other countries. Asian youth's love for
westren
a film about life in the western United States during the period of exploration and development
Western
western
music and hate for traditional attire is an example of
this
imminent threat.
Thus
, the only way to save
tradition
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the tradition
of
country
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the country
a country
is by arranging cultural programmes through governmental support. In conclusion,
althoughcultural
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although cultural
aspects of community can only be highlighted by interest of local authorities,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think that they must support universities and hospitals
for
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in
the development better healthy and literate society.
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