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The proportions of Yemen and Italy in 2020 and projections for 2050.

The pie chart depicts the proportional representations of different ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000, and it is expected to 2050. It is clear that the number of adults aged 60 and older in Italy is projected to significantly increase in 2050, while
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 in Yemen declines slightly in 2050. According to the chart, the
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 of 0-14 years accounts for half of all proportions by 2000 in Yemen, the number of 0-14
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 is expected to decline to 37% in 2050.
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, those aged 15-59 are projected to increase from 46.3% to 57.3%. With regard to the 60+
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, it is the smallest change in the three groups, it rose slightly from 3.6% in 2000 to 5.7% in 2050.
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 to Yemen, Italy has different growth trends of proportions. As can be seen, the aged 15-59 are the biggest in 2000, accounting for 61.6%, and the elder (60+years) constitute 24.1% at the same time. Those are expected to share fairy percentages in 2050, at 46.2% and 42.3
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%, respectively
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, the child in Italy will become less and less, it is projected to decline from 14.3% to 11.5% in 2050.

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