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The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree

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The most effective means of reducing the rate of youths are increasing parenting skills among the parents. Proper
psycological
mental or emotional as opposed to physical in nature
psychological
sociological
 development of
child
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children
the child
a child
 depends on
environment
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the environment
 and their
upbrings
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up brings
. I strongly agree with
this
 view that parents can control their children from worse situation. Parents want to grow
up their
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up, their
 adolescents as a successful person.
Moreover it
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Moreover, it
 cannot
possible
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possibly
 if parents do not have proper knowledge. Educated parents raise their children in a better way. They provide every possible way to build up their youngster's career. They always remain concerned about their
child
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child's
future
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future, hence
hence
 they teach their
child
 to identify what is wrong and what is
write
Suggestion
written
.
As a
result their
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result, their
 children do not attach any crime. On the other hands uneducated parents are not conscious about their youngsters. Due to their lack of skill they
can not
can not
cannot
 teach their children properly and since they engage with different types of crime. To conclude parenting skills can prevent
child
 from crime.
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