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The consumption of world’s resources is increasing dangerous rate. What are the causes and solutions?

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It is considered that the
usage
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use
 of different resources like water, fuel, electricity
have soared
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has soared
 across the world.
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examine
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examines
problems
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the problems
 by
consumption
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the consumption
 of more amount of needs and discuss the possible solutions. The two main problems caused are resources will extinct and soar in prices. The natural resources like water and petrol used in more more quantities will cause it
end
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to end
ended
.
For
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instance in
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instance, in
 India the population is more and usage of resources are more. Which causes deficiency in availability. In India water is available in less quantity.
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Also another
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Also, another
 flaw is
increase
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an increase
the increase
 in prices. If more people were using
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this materials
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these materials
this material
 cause less availability. Which make public to
inport
commodities (goods or services) bought from a foreign country
import
input
imports
 from other countries for high wages. Example the petrol available in India is less quantity and it is imported from other places for peak expenditure. By following certain measures like use of renewable
energy
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 sources and minimising wastage of
reaources
available source of wealth; a new or reserve supply that can be drawn upon when needed
resources
, we can reduce the flaws. Using renewable
energy
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 sources like solar, wind can reduce consumption of other sources.
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sources
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source
have
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has
hogh life span
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a high life span
high life span
 and cannot be extinct. By replacing them in places of non-renewable
energy
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 source can reduce the effects.
Also
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 by using available
energy
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 in correct proportion can minimise the problems. Example highly developed nations like USA uses renewable
energy
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 sources for the purpose of their need. Which tends them to procure their natural resources. To conclude, the people around the world were consuming different natural resources in large quantities. Which will have defects and it can be reduced by replacing non-renewable sources and exact usage of materials.

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