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Some people think that charity organizations should only offer help to people of their own country. But others believe that these organizations should give aid to people in great need wherever they live. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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“To have enough to share; to know the joy of giving; to thrill with all the sweets of life - is living”. Helping others is a very virtuous thing. Charities help in basically two ways. One is by offering support to people in their own
country
, and the
second
 is by helping the needy irrespective of their
country
. In
this
 essay I intend to delve into the benefits of both approaches. There are many advantages if charities help their own
country
’s people.
Firstly
, these
organisations
remain
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remains
 directly in touch with
the needy
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the needs
. They can see how the money or other the other resources provided by them are being used. It has been well said that
charity
 begins at home. What is more, domestic
charities
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charities'
 target problems specific to their home
country
,
for instance
 the Help Age India is an Indian
charity
 providing help for the aged in India. There are
also
 many advantages if these
organisations
 help the needy in any corner of the world. In
such
 cases these
organisations
 work on a larger platform and provide help for global issues. A larger platform is a must if one has a lot to offer in
charity
. Help activities can be better spread through a larger network. Help need not be always in the form of money. It can be in the form of services
also
.
For example
, these
organisations
 can provide doctors and teachers who volunteer to provide medical aid and
also
 teach in the under-developed nations. Help in any form is good. The condition of one’s
country
 could influence the way of helping. In a developed
country
, where even the poorest of the poor
has
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have
 the basic amenities of life, it would be better to help in any part of the world where people need help. But, in the case of a developing or underdeveloped
country it
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country, it
 would be better to help those around you. To put it in a nutshell, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
 that the purpose of
charity
 organizations is to help people in need and it does not matter where
this
 help goes. If
people
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the people
 of the home
country
 need help
then
 it would certainly be advisable to help those around you
first
.

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