In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Nowadays, school students behav
iours ha
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student
students'
ve changed a lot than a decade ago.
This
is caused due to various reasons and it becomes the most important problem in every nation. Country needs
to addr
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The country
A country
ess these issues to prevent
this
deterioting si
tuation.
become worse or disintegrate
deteriorating
There are two important problems are drugs
addiction
and technology
addiction
. Pupils can be addicted easily by drugs due to available easily. They can buy from shops and bad social elements. it has affecte
d
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It
the concentration in studies, attendance and discipline.
Next
, Technology
addiction
can be famous in recent years due to invention of m
odern gad
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the invention
gets. Most of the students are using smartphones, gaming gadgets
, laptops and
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gaming, gadgets
tablets. These are consuming considerable a
mount of their time
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a considerable amount
at home and schools. They are mostly watching inappropriate contents and playing games. These are causing poor concentration in studies, poor sleep, lack of attendance in school, poor social behaviour and
finally
poor scores. To address above
problems, Pa
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address, above
rents and Te
achers shal
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Parents, and
l be working together with students. They shall provide proper guidance, carefully watching their activities and friend circle for drug addicted children. They have to spend more time with children and understand their issues with schools and society. They have to create more bonding with them.
For example
, They make a plan tour with children. Technology
addiction
can be addressed by providing proper parental guidance to the children. They should not encourage to buy advanced electronic gadgets. Even if they buy, provide an appropriate parental control for all electronic gadgets, which can be vulnerable to their health. They would have engaged with social activities
such
a volunteering for traffic control and scribe for blinds, Meeting relatives and encourage to participate
physical games.
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to participate in physical
In conclusion, globally school students behav
iours ar
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student
students'
e challening iss
ue.
requiring full use of your abilities or resources
challenging
However
, if parents and schools are providing proper guidance and an individual attention,
this
will be solution of these problems.

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