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Parents and teachers make many rules for children to encourage good behaviour and protect them from danger. However, children would benefit from fewer rules and greater freedom. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Many rules are made for children by their parents and teachers for protecting them or for developing their good
behaivour
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. Many believe that children will be become more disciplined by obeying rules of the society.
However
, some believe that children will learn more from their
exprience
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
 or mistakes that they will make when
freedom
 is given to them. In my opinion, making rules for children are very important in their younger
ages but
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ages, but
freedom
 can be given to them once they have started understanding what is good or bad for them. Parents and teachers
makes
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make
 rules for the children considering their better future in mind. I believe as a
child we
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child, we
 should follow
rules
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the rules
 made by our parents at home and teachers at school. Rules
such
 as early to bed and early to rise is very important to develop an
attitute
a complex mental state involving beliefs and feelings and values and dispositions to act in certain ways
attitude
 of discipline in people.
This
attitute
a complex mental state involving beliefs and feelings and values and dispositions to act in certain ways
attitude
 will help them to grow
succesfull
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
successfully
 in life.
Moreover
, in
country
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a country
countries
 like India we have been taught to greet our
elders
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elders'
 daily which help us to stay connected
with
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to
 our roots of morals and values.
Also
, rules of thanking someone develop an
attitute
a complex mental state involving beliefs and feelings and values and dispositions to act in certain ways
attitude
 of
gratitute
a feeling of thankfulness and appreciation
gratitude
 in children from their younger age only.
However
, some believe that children will learn less
from
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about
 rules and more by giving them
freedom
. The logic behind their
this
 believe system may be that by giving
freedom
 to children they will learn from their own mistakes and will gain experience.
Utill
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Until
 we will not try something off the track how will be discover new things.
Finally
, I believe that rules should be made for children by their parents and teachers to learn the basis of life till a certain age and later on they should be
let
being or located on or directed toward the side of the body to the west when facing north
left
 free to explore new things in life.
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