Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school program (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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What are the benefits of including voluntary services in school curriculum? Some people believe that
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must be included as a compulsory subject;
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, in my opinion, I consider working in either sports centres or charitable centres have benefits.
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of all, these compulsory unpaid jobs would change their perception towards life, Take students those who work with charitable society, they would understand the difficulties of others, they,
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, realise that how their parents take care them and the amount of hard work they do in order to provide better facilities
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for
their children.
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understanding helps students to focus on studies
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rather than wasting time on unnecessary things. Another point is taken into account is that, while participating voluntary services, children get exposed to various working situations. The amount of experience, which they gain from
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, assists them to find out better jobs in the future life.
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to
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, serving without any payment, can be helped them to make career choices at very young age;
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, they become focused on
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of them or themselves
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profession at their young age. Apart from
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, by doing
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life experiences, which means they would have
richer learning outcome
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a richer learning outcome
and better understanding of concepts.
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