Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school program (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).To what extent do you agree or disagree?

What are the benefits of including voluntary services in school curriculum? Some people believe that
this
must be included as a compulsory subject;
however
, in my opinion, I consider working in either sports centres or charitable centres have benefits.
First
of all, these compulsory unpaid jobs would change their perception towards life, Take students those who work with charitable society, they would understand the difficulties of others, they,
then
, realise that how their parents take care them and the amount of hard work they do in order to provide better facilities
to
Suggestion
for
their children.
This
understanding helps students to focus on studies
,
Accept space
,
rather than wasting time on unnecessary things. Another point is taken into account is that, while participating voluntary services, children get exposed to various working situations. The amount of experience, which they gain from
this
, assists them to find out better jobs in the future life.
In addition
to
this
, serving without any payment, can be helped them to make career choices at very young age;
therefore
, they become focused on
thier
of them or themselves
their
profession at their young age. Apart from
this
, by doing
thsese
plural of "this"
these
kind works, help them to learn various concepts in a better manner as they witness
reall
the basic unit of money in Brazil; equal to 100 centavos
real
life experiences, which means they would have
richer learning outcome
Suggestion
a richer learning outcome
and better understanding of concepts.
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