Some suggest than young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be fo people who do this.

These days, millions of
youngster
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youngsters
are being
enrolled in
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enrolled, in
universities every
year
.
Certain number
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A certain number
of people believe that young people should emphasize
work
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
sometime rather than continue studying in tertiary degree after high school graduation.
This
essay will discuss some positive and negative impacts of a gap
year
. On the one hand, higher education is excessive money required an event. So, some young people decide to
work
hard to save enough money for paying their
first
year
of university expenses like a tuition fee, a living cost and books. Money that they saved allows them to more focus on academic studies
instead
of worrying about
financial situation
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the financial situation
financial situations
. As
result they
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a result, they
a result they
can achieve high academic result.
In addition
, there is a fact that people gain quite a lot of soft skills
for example
a time management and a communication skill while
there
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they're
working, these skills help students to learn more in academic levels.
On the other hand
, it is very often observed that many young people
are do not want
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don't want to study
don't want study
do not want study
study
again after
work
a
sometime
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some time
.
Basically it
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Basically, it
can be said that motivation to learn things goes down slightly after
work
. A recent survey revealed one in three people under age of twenties never come back to academic
study
after a gap
year
. As
result
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a result
, they
put
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will put
themselves
in
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at
high risk of unemployment in the future. Even some people
decides
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decide
to
study
after couple years of working, their ability to learn things usually become slower. Generally,
this
consequence influences their overall academic achievements. To sum up, some people prefer to
work
one
year
after
graduate
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graduation
a high school.
Although
, working a while after high school gives chances for students to earn some money and gain some skills
from
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from field work
work
field
,
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,
there are some
disadvantages
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disadvantages, for
for example
people’s learning ability become slower
further
some people never come back to
study
.

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