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Some people think that encouraging people to using their cars less and public transport more will help in declining the rising levels of congestion and air pollution.

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Introduction
Nowadays, people
use
Use synonyms
 more private cars which lead to more cars on the roads and results in heavy traffic jams and air pollution. These problems are more common in big cities across the world. I agree that the only effective way to solve
this
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 problem is by encouraging people to
use
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 public transportation
instead
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 of using private cars.
Body paragraph 1
There are many benefits of using public transport.
Firstly
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, it is economical to
use
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 buses and trains as daily commute as fares are quite cheaper. People do not have to buy their own vehicles which means they do not have to pay for fuel and vehicle maintenance services.
Recent study
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A recent study
The recent study
 reveals that car owners expend around 40% of their monthly income on fuel and maintenance services.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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, it will save
time
objective case of they
them
 a lot of time because public transportation, nowadays, are developed to be faster and more convenient for the citizens.
For instance
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, Bullet Train in Japan, which connects Tokyo to
man
a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'as' or 'too' or 'so' or 'that'; amounting to a large but indefinite number
many
 other cities, is very high-speed- around 320 kilometres per hour.
Body paragraph 3
Moreover
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, using less private cars
save
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to save
saves
environment
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the environment
 and people’s health as well. Reduced number of cars on
road results
Suggestion
the road results
 in less carbon-dioxide emissions- a greenhouse
gas which
Accept comma addition
gas, which
 is the biggest cause of air pollution and climate change.
Thus
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, it will reduce the burden of
air-borne
moved or conveyed by or through air
airborne
urban
 diseases
such
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 as
lungs
Suggestion
lung
 cancer, emphysema and many more.
Hence
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, it improves the quality of life.
Conclusion
To sum up, in order to cope with rapidly number of private cars and worsening air quality, the government and individuals must adopt change and reduce the
use
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 of private transport.

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