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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement.

#country #language
The graphs show the time it takes employees to commute to their workplaces
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 and the mode of
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 Figures are given for both inside and outside London
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 For the majority of the UK
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 the number of commuters decreases as commuting time increases
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 Almost
half
 of the commuters take less than 15 minutes to get to their place of
work
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 while only around 3 percent spend over an
hour
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 Indeed
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 three quarters of commuters outside London reach
work
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half
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 In London
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 the trend is very different
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 The figures show that it takes much longer to get to
work
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 Less than
half
 of the commuters have reached
work
 within
half
 an
hour
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 with the percentage reaching
work
 in less than fifteen minutes significantly lower than the percentage reaching
work
 in thirty minutes
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Moreover
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 forty percent of people spend up to an
hour
 commuting
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 with an equal proportion in the 30-45 minute bracket and the 45-60 minute bracket
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 and a
further
 sixteen percent commute for over an
hour
 – over five times the proportion outside London
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 Regarding the mode of
transport
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 the car is dominant both inside and outside London
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 significantly so outside London
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 where other modes of
transport
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 Of the other modes of
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 walking and taking the bus
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 taking the train and using the underground
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 London
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 the car accounts for about one
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However
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 public
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half
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journey
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 the train and underground being more popular than the bus
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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