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Summarize the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010 given in the graph.

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The graph depicts the fact of the number of people donating their part of income to charity in the year 1990 and 2010. Giving away money to the penurious people, showing a helping hand always appreciated. The world
that is
 made of, is not by independent living, but by proving a butt rest to each other. By peeking at the graph, in the year 1990 there are quite a lot of magnanimous people of the
age
group
 between 36 to 50 years have contributed the most amount to the charity.
However
, young adults of
age
 18 years to 15 years contributed the least, which is evident as they have just started their career. With
second
 place adults of
age
group
 51 to 65 years have contributed 35% to it followed by the 65 years
age
group
. In comparison to 2010 there is a significant change for the people of
age
group
 18 years to 25 years where there is a difference of almost 10%, stating the fact they have become less generous and self sufficed.
In contrast
, people who have retired have been adding more to the collection with 40% along with 35% in the
age
group
 of above 65 years. Concluding with facts from above that, with the years passing by, people are more of holding themselves back, in contributing to the charity.
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