IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

Some people think that planting trees in open spaces in cities and town is more important than building houses.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #trees #spaces #cities #town #houses
In the modern society, some civilian considers that planting trees in
city
Suggestion
the city
 is important aspects than
building house
Suggestion
building houses
a building house
. From my perspective, l completely agree with
statement
Suggestion
the statement
 and l will give my standpoint of views.
To begin
 with
，
Accept space
,
,
planting trees are important
to
Suggestion
To
 provide oxygen for citizens which are more effective than building houses.
first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
 of all, people live in
city
 of all time
that is
 affected by environmental issues. So
，
Accept space
,
,
planting trees are making carbon dioxide in atmospheric conditions.
For example
, in the central
city
of
Suggestion
by
 road has a wide range of cars which exhaust emissions from vehicles.
This
 problem is not easily fixed in
city
Suggestion
the city
, but people can grow green trees to deal with
this
 issue.
As a result
，
Suggestion
,
 citizens can get higher levels of ecosystems in
central
Suggestion
the central city
central cities
city
 that it is more healthier ways to reduce air pollution. Another reason is that trees are significant functions to decline natural disaster in
city
 or towns.
such
Suggestion
Such
 as flooding and super typhoon.
For example
，
Accept space
,
,
in Australia the government would be willing to pay huge fees for planning trees because
this
 country always has super typhoon which are knocked down to
buildings
Suggestion
the buildings
 and raining all day.
However
, trees can absorb water to reducing disaster losses.
In addition
, sandstorms affected the people living in their places. So, planning trees are more important than house buildings. In conclusion, green trees have a positive impact to citizens that many people should grow trees in
city
Suggestion
the city
cities
. We believe that trees have many benefits to reduce air pollution.
Submitted by gail.gagarin on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: