You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#room #college #student #arrangement #work #accommodation #officer #situation #addresses #sir #madam

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letter to express my dissatisfaction with the

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allotment. I have been allocated

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in your college residence

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months earlier and I believe

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study

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and to be able to achieve

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number 7. I am sharing

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with another student, despite being constructed for sharing, it is not spacious enough for

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have their personal belonging and

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material. Due to having only one

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desk to share, It is difficult for us to manage our

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so cramped with most of our

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and a desk, there is no space for us to buy another desk and put it, which is highly unacceptable from my

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. Perhaps it would be

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idea to make a new living arrangement for us, which is more spacious for sharing and continues studying. I look for to hear from you soon. Yours Faithfully, Dhaval Chaudhari.

Wed Nov 13 2019

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 7.0

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8 paragraphs

184 words

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