You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#room #college #student #arrangement #work #accommodation #officer #situation #addresses #sir #madam

Dear Sir, I am writing

this

letter to express my dissatisfaction with the

room

allotment. I have been allocated

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in your college residence

few

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months earlier and I believe

room

environment does effect in

study

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and to be able to achieve

higher

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the higher

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score in exams.

This

is my

second

year in your college and I have spent

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fairly

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amount of time in

room

number 7. I am sharing

this

room

with another student, despite being constructed for sharing, it is not spacious enough for

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have their personal belonging and

study

material. Due to having only one

study

desk to share, It is difficult for us to manage our

study

time. The

room

it self

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so cramped with most of our

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cloths

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jam packed

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and a desk, there is no space for us to buy another desk and put it, which is highly unacceptable from my

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prospective

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. Perhaps it would be

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idea to make a new living arrangement for us, which is more spacious for sharing and continues studying. I look for to hear from you soon. Yours Faithfully, Dhaval Chaudhari.

Wed Nov 13 2019

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