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Some people think that planting trees in open spaces in cities and town is more important than building houses.To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In the modern society, some civilians consider that planting trees in
city
Suggestion
the city
 is more important aspect than building houses. From my perspective, l completely agree with the statement and l will give my standpoint of views.
To begin
 with
，
Accept space
,
,
planting trees are more necessary than providing residential areas.
first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
 of all, people that reside in the
city
 permanently are affected by environmental issues.
Therefore
, trees planting activities
reduces
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reduce
 the amount of carbon dioxide in the air
pollution atmospheric
Accept comma addition
pollution, atmospheric
 conditions on central roads where a high number of cars exhaust harmful emission.
This
 problem is not easily resolved,
although
 people can grow green trees where citizens can enjoy.
Consequently
, citizens can get higher levels of ecosystems in
central
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the central city
central cities
city
 that it will be healthier to reduce air pollution. Another reason is that trees are
significant declining natural disaster
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a significant declining natural disaster
significant declining natural disasters
 in
city
 or towns.
such
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Such
 as flooding.
For instance
, in Australia the government would be willing to pay huge fees for planning trees because
this
 country always has super typhoon which are knocked down on buildings and whole day rain. Whereas, trees can absorb water to reducing disaster losses.
Moreover
, sandstorms affected the people living in their places. So, planning trees are more important than house buildings. In conclusion, green trees have a positive impact to citizens that many people should grow trees in
city
Suggestion
the city
cities
. We believe that trees have many benefits due to
this
 many people should grow trees in the
city
.
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