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Some people believe it is a good idea for students to work part-time to ensure better opportunities in future. Others are of the opinion, job during study distracts the individual. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is now common to mix the university free time with a part-time
job
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, some may think
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 improves future access to enhanced quality of life.
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, there are some that find
working
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work
 while studying bad for the learning capacity. I will argue why having a
job
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 while being a student is a smart way to transition to adulthood. It is a great achievement to become independent of our parents.
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, the minute we learn to ride a bicycle without our parent's help, we dream about getting as far as we possibly can with it.
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, it is extremely useful to have a
job
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 while studying to learn the importance of self-sufficiency and money-management skills.
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, it is a good idea to have extra money and decide for ourselves on what to spend it or save it for larger projects. Alternatively, having too many additional responsibilities apart from the university obligations can easily risk our future.
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 happens when a student decides to
favor
promote over another
favour
 their
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 of the long-term benefit of graduating as a professional.
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 it can seem like a good idea to drop out of university to earn some immediate money, the consequences of not preparing for a competitive
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 market can be chaotic. In my opinion, the sooner a person starts working, the sooner
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 person will understand the value of being independent. Some others would argue students need to focus all their efforts on scoring good grades and not being distracted by external factors,
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 as jobs. The true value of becoming self-sufficient is to learn how to build upon a strong foundation and ultimately enjoying a better future.
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