You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter ---Explain why you would like the job ----Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ -----Say how you would spend your free time while in Australia.

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Dear Sir/ Madam. I wish to apply for a position you published in

Australian

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an Australian

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magazine seeking

for

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apply

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a nanny for your

six year old

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six-year-old

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daughter. I would love the job because am fund of young ones and it will give me an opportunity to explore Australia. I have

broad

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a broad

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knowledge of attaining to the need of children

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Am suitable for the job as a paediatric nurse in a renowned hospital with 5 years

experience

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of experience

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and have been exposed to different kinds of infant disease. I have worked excellently as a Nanny for one year. Am exceptional and

hard working

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, exceeding client

expectation

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expectations

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. The experience and

skill

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skills

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acquired will help me to be outstanding. To visit Australian beach has been my desire, so my spare time can be used for that. Having all these qualities, you will find me suitable to take care of your ward. Am looking forward to a favourable response from you. If you want to contact me, [email protected] is my email address. Yours faithfully Gift AU

Fri Nov 15 2019

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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0Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

170 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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The Greeting

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