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The international community must act immediately to ensure all nations to reduce their consumption of fossil fuels e.g. gas and oil. To what extent do you agree/ disagree?

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There is no doubt that we need urgent action to mitigate the utilisation of fuels across the globe. Governing bodies
such
 as United Nations should act upon it earnestly and ask countries to stop using up these resources.
This
 essay will explain how fossil fuels are related to global warming and why it is necessary to act on it. These fuels are the biggest contributors in the global warming. Pollution, disturbed weather condition and animal extinction are hinting us to avoid using extensive use of these oils.
This
 disturbance is not only on
land but
Accept comma addition
land, but
 it has been seen in the water
also
, many
amphians
relating to or characteristic of animals of the class Amphibia
amphibians
are going
Suggestion
go
extict
no longer in existence; lost or especially having died out leaving no living representatives
extinct
 every year because of
this
 horrid consumption.
Thus
, it is
intergral
existing as an essential constituent or characteristic
integral
for
Suggestion
to
 the International community to come together and decrease the
over using
exploitation to the point of diminishing returns
overusing
 of these fuels. It is important that governing bodies should seriously look upon
this
 situation as a biggest threat to mankind. In order to save the humans and animals it is necessary for them to action upon and ensure that all the countries reduces their use of these gases. The damages done by us
have already begin
Suggestion
have already begun
,
however by
Accept comma addition
however, by
 minimizing the use we would be able to show our children the great world where we grew up. To conclude, excessive consumption of horrid gases
have led
Suggestion
has led
 us to global warming.
This
 can only
stopped
Suggestion
stop
 when all the humanity comes together and vouch to save the mother nature.
Therefore
, I agree that all the nations
along side
side by side
alongside
 the Internation governing bodies should immediately take action to stop consumption of fossil fuels.
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