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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, it appears that many companies have allowed their employees to wear anything that they prefer while the demand for work uniform has dropped significantly.
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 has remained as the source of constant debate as people argue about its effects on work efficiency.
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 essay will elaborate on both views from a professional prospective. People have different objectives when it comes to fashion and clothing. To many firm recruiters,
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 impression is what they consider when choosing applicants, including the way they present themselves through
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the dressing
. Putting on tidy and luxurious-looking clothes can make a better impression of being careful and attentive compared to comfortable clothing. As well as that, well-dressed employees will
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 impresses other businesses as they bring a sense of professionalism. For
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 reason, there is no arguing that dressing smartly is a preferable option for several firms.
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, in
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 constantly changing world, people have less interest in wearing clothes that are uncomfortable, especially the youth. On the one hand, wearing comfortable clothing can help improve well-being as well as their state of mind.
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, one’s capabilities
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have now become
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 great importance in evaluating employees, especially when they work from home and are not required to maintain face-to-face interactions with others.
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, clothing has become a less crucial factor in the eyes of employers. In my opinion, one’s ability should be more valuable than their appearance, and
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 anyone should be able to dress the way they like and feel good about.
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, companies must come up with policies to make sure that comfortable clothes remain appropriate for the workplace. In the light of these facts, one can conclude that it is of great importance for people to dress for themselves but still manage to look decent.

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