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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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 the proportion of
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Canadians using social networks in 2014 and 2015. In general, the majority of people used one
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sites
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;
however
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, there was an increasing number of those utilizing more than one. Evidently, the figure for one-site users in 2014 was 36%, but the year 2015 witnessed a considerable decrease of 8% even though it remained the highest of all.
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 similar downward trend was the number of citizens who had never used any social networking
sites
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, accounting for one-fifth of the population. Ranking
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quantity
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 of Canadian people having accounts on two
sites
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 when one out of four admitted bearing
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 habit. Another noticeable point is that multiple SNS users rose dramatically, especially those having three or four
sites
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. The figures for these categories were 4 and 3
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 respectively. A slight change can be seen in two-site and five-site users with just
a
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growth of 1 and 2
percent
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per cent
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sites with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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