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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given graphic describes the opinion of
tourist
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tourists
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 who visited four different
kind
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kinds
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 of attractions in Grand Britain in 1999. The most notorious thing is that tourists have visited more theme parks and that gives
this
 kind of attraction a 38 % of preference among people who have visited Britain.
However
 from the theme park
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category
categorie
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,categorie
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a
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apply
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47% of people prefer to visit Blackpool Pleasure Beach and after
that
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,that
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 there is
a
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apply
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17 % who goes to Alton towers,
a
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apply
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16% to
pleasureland
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pleasure land
pleasure and
 and
a
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apply
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10%
for
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to
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 both Chessington world of adventure and Legoland. Museums and galleries are the
next
 more visited attractions with
a
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37%
from
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of
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 the total amount, historic houses and monuments earn only 16% and
finaly
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finally
 wildlife, perks and zoos are the least visited attractions in Britain with a low 9%. As we can appraise the trend for
tourist
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tourists
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 is visiting more theme parks
as well as
 museums and galleries and the attraction
who
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whom
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tourist
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tourists
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 want to visit at least are zoos and wildlife parks.

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