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People living in the twenty-first century have better standards of living than people who lived in the past. To what extent [completely/ absolutely --- partly/ somehow] agree or disagree?

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The advent of
language
 translator applications has revolutionized the way we communicate. It
has enables
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enables
has enabled
 us to communicate with people irrespective of the
language
 they speak. While there are many who perceive these applications as detrimental, I strongly disagree, in my
opinion these
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opinion, these
 applications have destroyed the barrier of
language
. In
this
 essay we will consider both sides of the argument using examples from research conducted in the US and the UK, to derive a conclusion. On one
hand there
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hand, there
 is some evidence to suggest that these applications have
negative impact
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a negative impact
 on learning skills, as people prefer to use these applications rather than make an effort to learn a new
language
.
This
 is because most of these applications are easily available in the form of a mobile application, and people prefer to use these applications rather than attending a
language
 class. Another disadvantage is that these applications have put many people out of a job, as accessibility of these apps have rendered
translation
 jobs redundant. People prefer to use the application which
are
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is
 usually free and readily available rather than pay a hefty fee to a professional translator.
For example
, a recent survey in the US has shown that about 65% of the organizations which relied on professional translators have replaced them with
online
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the online translation application
an online translation application
translation
 application.
On the other hand
,
although
 there are a few disadvantages of
translation
 applications, its positive impact cannot be overstated.
This
 is largely because they enable people to communicate with each other irrespective of the
language
 they speak,
this
 has encouraged people to explore countries which they previously would not have considered due to
difference
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differences
the difference
 in
language
.
For example
, a study conducted by
University
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the University
 of California has shown a 40% increase in Americans
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to non-English speaking countries, and a majority of these tourists relied on these apps. Another advantage is contrary to the common belief that people have stopped learning new
language
, there is a constant increase in adopting new languages, thanks to the ease and availability of these
translation
 applications. As most of these applications are available in the form of a mobile app, people do not have to rely on an instructor to learn a new tongue. From the aforementioned arguments and examples, I believe that the advantages of these online
translation
 applications far outweigh the disadvantages. It is predicted that
further
 advancement in technology will make these applications flawless, and completely eradicate the hindrance in communication caused by
language
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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